Hey guys, as Chase told us that we are allowed to use more sources into our paper, I looked for new sources to finish my paper. I found a nice quote of Marie Curie which I could work into my paper. It fitted perfectly my paper. Additionally I searched for statistics which prove the things I am saying in my essay. In general, I tried to make my writing more fluently and easier to read. By putting topic sentence in front of nearly every paragraph I have reached that aim. I also had a try to understand the American reader and how he is different from the reader I was used to write to. He needs a general overview at the beginning of the essay instead of the German who wants a clear climax in his reading. A further point of interest of Chase was that my sources communicate better with each other. I tried to do that by putting comments at the beginning of each paragraph. That somehow shows the reader how the essay will go on instead of saying him: You have to build up an own opinion based on the information I am giving you. At the end I would say that my essay is now really round and that I have developed so much as a writer. I got new ideas of writing which just gave me a different view on my writing. Also analytical talking in class gave me interesting ideas how to write my essay.